Brianna Leuzzi
English 1101
Revision Questions
Prof. Young
1. After I receive comments back from my teacher I begin to make changes whenever I get free time. Sometimes this can be later in the day, sometimes the next day, and even a few days later. I need free time to look over everything and correct it and this takes a while so I have to pick a time where I have multiple hours.
2. My most revised essay was the Sibonia vs. Pie essay. At first, I did not separate my paragraphs for each separate point. Instead, I combined the paragraphs based on characters, not different ideas. I made a major correction by creating additional paragraphs for different ideas and adding more details to make it complete. For example in the first draft I used Darg as an example but didn't explain who he was. Thus, in my second draft I included, " Darg is this big muscular ,an who takes care of punishing the slaves when they do something wrong." I also added more details and made sentences more clear throughout the essay.
3. When I begin to make revisions to my essay I pay most attention to the comments left by my teacher. I think these are most important because it shows what she wants from my essay and what I am missing/ need to fix. After I address all the comments I try to add more detail and try to fix some unclear sentences.
4. Revision for content and revision for grammar/ spelling has changed. I know that revision for content means finding the main point of each paragraph, making sure there are transitions, an example, quotes, explanation, and a closing th0ought for each paragraph all while remaining clear and to the point. On the contrary, revision for grammar and spelling is reading each sentence carefully and writing every mark and mistake that needs to be changed. We learned to use symbols to represent specific grammatical errors like fragments, comma splices, run-ons, etc.
5. Once I receive feedback, I re- read what it says and depending on that I will revise or rewrite my essay. I think the feedback sets the tone for my essay. If it has a lot of negative comments I will completely write a new essay but keep my same ideas. However, if the comments are minimal and are easy to change, I will keep the same essay and revise it.
6. As I revise I get frustrated the most when I thought I was very clear about a topic and I get comments back saying to clarify this. I sit there and don't know how to make it any more clear or change something to make the reader understand more because in my mind it was fine.
7. When I revise, it becomes much easier when I have a lot of comments back from my teacher. This lets me know what I'm doing wrong and where I need improvement. It also lets me know what the teacher likes within my paragraph. This helps me get a good idea of how to fix my essay and helps me create my next step in the revision process.
